Some teacher feedback

We showed one of our teachers the rough cut, and asked her what she thought about it.  However we asked mainly about the opening scene's as that was the bits that we had focused on the most at the beginning of editing. She had a lot to say about narrative in general.

 Although she didn't say many good things about it, she did give us some constructive criticism. 

Here's what she said;

"I feel you have way too much narrative in the beginning and not much in the end, it should really be the other way around. Meaning more narrative at the end, do you get what I mean?"

"You've crammed a lot of narrative at the beginning, they are greats shots and I love the black and white with the border you used!"

"Near the end i could tell you are starting to run out of clips with base tracks which is why its best the narrative should be at the beginning, since you do have a lot of base track with the dress and you on the bench; it makes sense that you put these in at the beginning instead of the narrative black and white clips, those go nice at the end"

"Make sure you add the sounds of the birds and clock ticking at the beginning"

"When Ade throws whatever that is at you...make it slow motion so that its clearer to the audience what he is throwing"

 I personally wasn't there after re editing but I have been told that she was much happier with it by the end